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We Are Becoming Increasingly Dependent On Computers Essay

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  • do a vocabulary exercise
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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer technology. It is used in business, crime detection and even to fly planes. What will it be used for in future? Is this dependence on technology a good thing or should we be suspicious of its benefits?

As we move into the twenty-first century, it is clear to see that we have become more and more dependent on computers and information technology. This technology now reaches into almost every area of our lives and it is easy to predict that this phenomenon is only going to grow. My personal belief is that this presents a variety of dangers.

It is highly likely that in the future there will be comparatively few aspects of our lives that will not be influenced by computer technology. The probability is that it will control more and more forms of communication, transforming fields such as education and business when video-conferencing platforms become more stable. It might even affect romance with more people forming relationships online.

While there may be benefits to this technological revolution, there are also a number of potential dangers. Perhaps the most serious of these would be  that if people rely on computers too much for communication, they could in fact begin to communicate less well. For example, if every member of a family had their own computer screen and smart phone, they might speak less and less often to one another and simply look at a screen. This would be serious because our ability to communicate is an essential part of our humanity.

My conclusion is that the growth of computer technology is inevitable, but that this may not be entirely positive. Just one area in which it is possible to foresee dangers is communication, and if we are going to ensure that computers do not become a negative influence, we need to think carefully how we use them.

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Thinking about the question

We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer technology. It is used in business, crime detection and even to fly planes. What will it be used for in future? Is this dependence on technology a good thing or should we be suspicious of its benefits?

A double question

The first point to note about the question is that there are in fact 2 questions. This is quite common in IELTS essays and it very, very important that you answer both halves of the question or you will be penalised heavily for Task Response.

The open question

The first question is an open question: “What will it be used for in the future?”. In a way, this is the harder question as you need to think yourself of 2/3 areas in which computers will be used in the future. There are a number of possibilities here, just a few are:

  • education
  • communication
  • transport
  • personal robots

You do not need to be very imaginative. There are no prizes for originality. I’d suggest you pick 2 areas and briefly explain how they might be used in the future, perhaps contrasting what happens now.

The closed question

The second question is a “Yes/No” question. Note that you must directly provide an answer to the question. You should also see that it is quite possible to answer it with a “Slightly” answer by saying that there are equal benefits and dangers to computer technology. The trick to answering this question is to give a reason why for your answer.

Making your answer coherent

I have two suggestions to make the essay coherent. The first is to make sure you explain  your ideas . This means explaininghow the technology will be used in the future, rather than just listing different areas in which it will be used in and also explaining why it may or may not be dangerous.The second idea is to try and link your paragraphs together. One way to do this is to refer to the same ideas about how computer technology when you write about the possible dangers.

Structuring the essay

There are 2 main possible structures for this essay. One is to write a topic paragraph about each question and a separate conclusion. The other is to write 2 topic paragraphs about how computers will be used in the future and then use the conclusion paragraph to answer the second question. If you take this second approach, be sure to write a complete paragraph for your conclusion, or the examiner may think you have not answered the question fully.

Grammar and vocabulary

This question asks you to write about the future. Be sure to try and vary your future language. It is important to use different structures to get a good band score; it is not enough just to avoid mistakes.You also want to try and avoid using the word “computer” all the time and try and find some varied vocab.

Read the essay notes

Here is my sample essay with notes. 

As we move into the twenty-first century, it is clear to see that we have become more and more dependent on computers and information technology. This technology now reaches into almost every area of our lives and it is easy to predict that this phenomenon is only going to grow. My personal belief is that this presents a variety of dangers.

It is highly likely that in the future there will be comparatively few aspects of our lives that will not be influenced by computer technology. The probability is that it will control more and more forms of communication, transforming fields such as education and business when video-conferencing platforms become more stable. It might even affect romance with more people forming relationships online.

While there may be benefits to this technological revolution, there are also a number of potential dangers. Perhaps the most serious of these would be  that if people rely on computers too much for communication, they could in fact begin to communicate less well. For example, if every member of a family had their own computer screen and smart phone, they might speak less and less often to one another and simply look at a screen. This would be serious because our ability to communicate is an essential part of our humanity.

My conclusion is that the growth of computer technology is inevitable, but that this may not be entirely positive. Just one area in which it is possible to foresee dangers is communication, and if we are going to ensure that computers do not become a negative influence, we need to think carefully how we use them.

(273 words)

Varying vocabulary

influence/affect/control are 3 similar words. See how I vary my vocabulary, rather than just repeating the same word.

Being academic

This essay is quite academic in tone. This is because I do not always use “is” and “will”. Rather I choose to lots of modal verbs such as would, might and may.

Matching the introduction and conclusion

The essay is extremely coherent. Part of the way I achieve this is by matching my introduction and conclusion. This is an easy trick to learn and will certainly help your essay writing.

 

IELTS Writing Sample

Dependence On Computer Good Or Bad

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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more auspicious of their benefits?

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Computerisation is a new trend which is very controversial. With the advance of computers, our life has become much easier. In the future, it is very likely that the computer can even be used to control flights automatically and many other fascinating things. However, it is also alarming because we are becoming more dependent on them. Therefore, some people believe it would lead to negative effects on the development of human beings. In this paper, I’m going to discuss how the computer can improve our life and why we need not be suspicious of their benefits.



Firstly, the computer has been proven to save many of our labour jobs. The computer assists people in doing repeated activities. For example, speaking of mathematics, it can be leveraged to perform many time-consuming mathematical questions which would take us ten times longer when using manual calculation.

Next, the efficiency of our performances could be increased. The behaviours of the computer are much disciplined. In other words, it follows strictly a set of predefined procedures to carry out a task. Hence, our jobs can be done with more accuracy.

Moreover, it reduces the participation of human in some dangerous jobs such as mining. For example, as mentioned in many newspapers, Japan is gradually replacing human with robots in mining related activities. Hence, the risk of losing human life can be significantly reduced.

Finally, I’m going to prove that we need not be suspicious of the computer’s benefits. This perception seems to stem from the thought that computers can take over the control of human or even replacing human. I admit that the computer is replacing human in some areas but those areas were well considered in advance. For example, instead of letting people to go to rescue in some dangerous areas, they use robots. Therefore, the usage of the computer is actually determined by us even though it is being used to replace human labour.

This writing is found under the following category(ies):
IELTS Opinion Essays  

Critique
+TASK ACHIEVEMENT
You were able to achieve the task by showing your viewpoint about:
1)what things computers can be used for in the future.
2)whether the dependence on computers is a good thing or not
3)should we be more auspicious of their benefits

+LEXICAL RESOURCE
Vocabulary is varied: computerisation, negative effects, disciplined, leveraged, procedures, stem from .

+COHERENCE AND COHESION
There are a number of transition words used: however, therefore, firstly, next, moreover, finally.
The organization is clear and logical. There are 5 paragraphs totally which is very good because it ensures you have enough time and still be able to express your ideas.

+GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY
>change "save" in the 2nd paragraph to "reduce"
from "the computer has been proven to save many of our labour jobs" to "the computer has been proven to reduce many of our labour jobs"
>change "perform" to "solve" in the 2nd paragraph.
>change "when using manual calculation" to "than doing manually" in the 2nd paragraph.




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